Friday, March 30, 2012

The Chase


He chases her as she pants with exhaustion and terror.

He grabs her, rips at her flesh.

Pain searing through her body.

She cries out…“HELP!“

Nobody does.

She’s devoured by her savage stalker.


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The challenge:

"Write a horror story in 33 words, without the words blood, scream, died, death, knife, gun, or kill. Good luck."

22 comments:

  1. I like it. A full story in so few words. Nice work!

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    1. Thank you dunce. I can't get over how hard it is to articulate something in only 33 words.

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  2. ooooh, chilling!! nicely done.

    best,
    MOV

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    2. Chilling?! Thank you. That is a very generous comment.

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  3. Devoured? Holy crap. WHAT was chasing her?

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    1. I left that up to you. I didn't want to restrict the mental image you created as you read it.

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    1. Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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  5. a slavering beast? A dream-chaser?
    shiver

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    1. Those are great images to attach to this story. And what a great descriptive word, 'slavering'. Really paints the picture. I wish I thought of it.

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  6. Amazing what we can do with so few words. Stalker. Perfect for the topic.

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    1. It is not an easy task to tell a story with such word restrictions, but that's why I love these challenges.

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  7. Devoured can be taken so many ways...none of them pleasant. Great story!

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    1. Thank you. You are right, no matter how you look at it it produces a gruesome image.

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  8. Being chased is always terrifying. Well done!

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    1. It is indeed, especially when it ends with being caught. Thank you.

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  9. You had me nervous at the title and terrified by the end... Excellent!

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  10. Ew, devoured? Definitely horror.

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  11. Thanks so much for linking up with Trifecta this week. Hope to see you back on Monday (10 am Eastern) for the new prompt and some exciting news about the changes Trifecta is making to spread the word about our writing community.

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  12. Dana, Carrie, and Fran - Thank you for your comments. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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