Friday, March 30, 2012

The Chase


He chases her as she pants with exhaustion and terror.

He grabs her, rips at her flesh.

Pain searing through her body.

She cries out…“HELP!“

Nobody does.

She’s devoured by her savage stalker.


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The challenge:

"Write a horror story in 33 words, without the words blood, scream, died, death, knife, gun, or kill. Good luck."
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22 comments:

  1. dunce twoMarch 30, 2012 at 11:55 AM

    I like it. A full story in so few words. Nice work!

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    1. ChrisMarch 30, 2012 at 4:00 PM

      Thank you dunce. I can't get over how hard it is to articulate something in only 33 words.

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  2. MOVMarch 30, 2012 at 12:47 PM

    ooooh, chilling!! nicely done.

    best,
    MOV

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    1. ChrisMarch 30, 2012 at 4:08 PM

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    2. ChrisMarch 30, 2012 at 4:12 PM

      Chilling?! Thank you. That is a very generous comment.

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  3. OldDogNewTitsMarch 30, 2012 at 7:22 PM

    Devoured? Holy crap. WHAT was chasing her?

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    1. ChrisMarch 31, 2012 at 1:08 AM

      I left that up to you. I didn't want to restrict the mental image you created as you read it.

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  4. UnknownMarch 30, 2012 at 9:25 PM

    Oh, horrible. Nicely done.

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  5. barbaraMarch 30, 2012 at 10:16 PM

    a slavering beast? A dream-chaser?
    shiver

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    1. ChrisMarch 31, 2012 at 1:13 AM

      Those are great images to attach to this story. And what a great descriptive word, 'slavering'. Really paints the picture. I wish I thought of it.

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  6. AnonymousMarch 30, 2012 at 11:13 PM

    Amazing what we can do with so few words. Stalker. Perfect for the topic.

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    1. ChrisMarch 31, 2012 at 1:22 AM

      It is not an easy task to tell a story with such word restrictions, but that's why I love these challenges.

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  7. AnonymousMarch 30, 2012 at 11:14 PM

    Devoured can be taken so many ways...none of them pleasant. Great story!

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    1. ChrisMarch 31, 2012 at 1:32 AM

      Thank you. You are right, no matter how you look at it it produces a gruesome image.

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  8. Mrs. One DayApril 1, 2012 at 11:40 AM

    Being chased is always terrifying. Well done!

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    1. ChrisApril 2, 2012 at 1:24 PM

      It is indeed, especially when it ends with being caught. Thank you.

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  9. DanaApril 1, 2012 at 2:50 PM

    You had me nervous at the title and terrified by the end... Excellent!

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  10. CarrieApril 1, 2012 at 5:15 PM

    Ew, devoured? Definitely horror.

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  11. FranApril 1, 2012 at 7:10 PM

    {shudder} good job!

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  12. TrifectaApril 2, 2012 at 4:41 AM

    Thanks so much for linking up with Trifecta this week. Hope to see you back on Monday (10 am Eastern) for the new prompt and some exciting news about the changes Trifecta is making to spread the word about our writing community.

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  13. ChrisApril 2, 2012 at 1:26 PM

    Dana, Carrie, and Fran - Thank you for your comments. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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